Eyes Wide Open…

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The Pick-Up

I’ve perfected a never-fail flirtatious look, mostly by accident.  A slight tip down of my head, then widened eyes as I looked up and around the room.  I knew my eyes were my best feature, everyone said so.  Big and brown with green flecks, expertly applied liner and smoky shadow, long, thick, sweeping lashes.  The miracle of mascara and extensions.  Not wearing my glasses forced me to stare a little myopically while things came into focus and only served to give me a wide-eyed, come hither look.  Mama always said something about men not making passes at girls who wear glasses —

Then, of course, the slight hair toss back over the shoulder, gently pursed and glossy lips, cheeks sucked in slightly, foretelling things to come…  Top teeth biting delicately into a bottom lip, eyes looking down shyly.  My right hand idly plays with the top button on my blouse, opening one, then another.

Then, look up, eyes widen, repeat, and suddenly I see him across the room.  Oh, my, he’s gorgeous and tall and dark.  Light eyes, I can’t tell the color yet, probably blue with that almost black hair.  Or hazel, maybe hazel.  Our eyes meet and I see a look of interest flicker over his face.  He’s well dressed, dark suit, crisp white shirt.  Banker, lawyer?  Mm, maybe.   Writer?  No, too well dressed…

Darn, wasn’t he coming this way yet?  My drink needed refilling and I was getting thirsty.  Oh, there he is, sliding onto an empty stool on my right, his arm reaching across the back of my chair as though we belonged together.  Just like that my wine glass was refilled and the bartender set a tumbler of what looked like Scotch, neat, in front of Mr. Gorgeous.  I like a man who takes charge, at least I do tonight…

It almost always worked like clockwork when I picked the right guy to surreptitiously glance at, the one whose eyes drifted from my face to my chest and then slowly back up to my face.  If his look was too carnal and I didn’t feel a spark, I might tamp down my flirting a little.  No sense asking for trouble.

But if there was that crackle of electricity, and the room was getting hotter, I’d touch my cold glass to my lips, then the hollow of my throat, watching from lowered lashes as his eyes followed the movement, lowering the glass inch by inch…

But sometimes I miscalculated and he wasn’t the perfect guy after all.   And that’s how I met you…

I’ll share more later.  What do you think so far?  Part 2 is here.

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72 responses

  1. Well , I for one want to keep reading 😉
    Turtle Hugs

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  2. I found myself trying to perfect that “look” whilst reading it 😁 yes definitely more x

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    1. Thanks! Yes, lots of practice in the mirror 😀

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      1. I’m seeing myself as a sexy Princess Diana 😁

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  3. I tried the look too…doubt it looked flirty. Definitely worth reading more of.

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    1. I’m sure that’s not true, lol! Thanks for reading!

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  4. Intriguing! I would definitely like to read more of this.

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  5. Well THAT was a great way to start the morning! 😀 Wonder where this is heading…?

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    1. It may have to get silly. Even as I’m trying to.write sexy it makes me.laugh

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  6. Love this – you take us from nervous to certain to hanging by a thread desperately wanting to know what happened next. More please 🙂

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    1. Thanks, will definitely do more

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  7. Very inviting prose…keep going. ☺

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  8. Loved it! My only thing is whenever romance authors describe all the details of the flecks in the eyes, I always think, wow, those characters have got seriously good eyesight or must be looking really deeply into each other’s eyes for a good long moment. It’s not something most people would notice in just a glance. Anyway, it is a pet peeve of mine. I like the narration a lot. Good stuff!

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    1. Good point. I have to look really closely in the mirror to see flecks in my eyes lol!

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  9. Definitely more please!

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  10. Interesting. Please feed us more. We need to be reviewing your writing.

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    1. Oh, I wish you would. Any suggestions are always welcome. I’m relatively new to writing fiction, but I want to try!

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      1. Yeah, do it. I will be happy to read and comment.

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      2. Thanks, finding time right now is hard. Soon, tho, very soon, fingers crossed…sounds like I’m offing hubby, doesn’t it? But, no, still more valuable alive, LOL

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      3. LOL Yeah, you sound like you got the shovel ready.

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  11. Intriguing….I want to read more… 🙂

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  12. Yes, definitely keep going! I want to hear about this miscalculation! 😀

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    1. Me, too! Not sure which way I’m going, but think it will have to be humor. Even trying to write the sexy stuff is kind of making me snicker…

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      1. That’s funny! I would have thought after reviewing romance novels, it would be second nature! But humor is good, too!

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      2. Well, I’m good at picking out a well written romance pretty quickly now — Lauren Layne is one of my new faves. Very sharp, funny, sexy, not just for the sex, cute story lines. If you haven’t read Wallbanger by Alice Clayton and the rest of her series, it’s pretty great, too. To me, a really good romance has humor, too — just like at home, LOL!

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      3. Yes! Absolutely! I’ll check them out. I’m reading a debut fantasy novel right now, believe it or not!

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      4. I do believe it. What I don’t understand is where you find the time!

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      5. I read like some people watch TV. I always have an audio book for when I exercise and I read myself to sleep every night. Plus, this time of year, my practice is not as busy – I have lots of breaks.

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      6. I’ve never tried an audio book before. I like music when I do the treadmill, but maybe I’ll try a book. I’m not much on TV, either, I’d rather read!

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  13. I really liked the way you write the details naturally. I have the ability to tell if someone has blue eyes. Ironically, never married nor really liked a blue eyed man as a boyfriend until after 50 years old. We lasted a couple of years but alas, still looking at strangers with a hopefully, a slightly romantic look. My grandchildren introduce me to single men. The last one my 11 year old grandson was washing his hands in a public bathroom and asked, “Are you married? My Nana could use a boyfriend.” I laughed when he told me but hugged him, too. 🙂

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    1. Oh, that’s wonderful! Never hurts to network, lol… keep practicing the look! Glad you like the story…

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  14. Love it, please keep going on this. I wonder what happened hmmm

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  15. Oh wow, terrific…does she spill her wine down his shirt?

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    1. Oh, man, are you looking over my shoulder??

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  16. I like this. Good writing. But my hair is peppered with gray. You got that part wrong, otherwise it’s awesome. Reading part II now, you did a nice cliff hanger.

    An editorial note: As you complete new chapters, put the link the the first at the top of the new post and go back and edit the previous with a link to the next. It helps people not have to search for the next part.

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    1. Thanks. Sorry I forgot the touch of gray. Did I get the light, almost creepy eyes right? And good tip, I should have done the link. Last time you’ll hear this from me, but you were right…

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      1. Well, and I really don’t have hair. My eyes are either seductive or creepy depending on whether a woman finds me attractive. True story.

        And I’m always right.

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      2. Bald and light creepy seductive eyes. Don’t see how Waco could help herself, poor girl.

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      3. It’s my immutable charm and…other skills…

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      4. La la la hands over my ears now I’ll never get that picture out of my head! Or did you just fix her car or unstoppable her toilet?

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      5. I did those things as well.

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      6. I’m sure you do everything well. Ooh, I think I threw up a little in my mouth there..

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  19. I try this look all the time but a girl will just tell me that I look constipated. I guess it is only a thing a woman can pull off. On a serious note this is very good writing. On to part 2.

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    1. You are totes adorbs! (The trick to the look is you have to practice in front of the mirror a lot, especially as a teenager. So I’m afraid that ship has sailed 😉 )

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      1. lol. Yes it has totally sailed, then.

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  20. Ok, you’ve got me hooked too. Anticipation’s building. More please! 🙂

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  22. Ooo la la hot! On to Parts 2, 3 & 4…

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    1. Oh, thank you! Hope you like the twists…

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      1. Loved them!! 🙂

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      2. Oh, yeah, I’m so glad!!

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      3. Are there more Parts?

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      4. Yep, Part 5 I’ll post tomorrow and then I’m not sure how many more, but at least a few more. It will have to have a happy ending, though, that’s just me!

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      5. Yay! On both parts…I’m a happy ending kinda gal too!! I look forward to it! 🙂

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  26. Oh, you broke my heart there. Let me go for part 2. Maybe you could redeem it

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